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Star Crossed Lovers- Retold by ~Help-Me-Fall:iconHelp-Me-Fall:



Hearts- For Aristocracy.
Diamonds- For the Merchancy.
The Soldiers belong to spades,
And the Clubs are the peasants and the maids.

I'm the Queen of hearts,
You're the Knave of Spades,
We're Undoing every-
Thing that law forbade.

But I knew,
from when I saw you,
Burst down our golden gates:
It erased all my hate...

You took.
My Breath.
Away.

I'm the Queen of hearts,
You're the Knave of Spades,
We're Undoing every-
Thing that law forbade.

Run, my Romeo,
They- are after you,
But I will still be yours,
By the new moon.

Run by the river,
My heart is on my sleeve,
Take good care my lover,
Hide amongst the trees,

Use the cover of darkness,
We Red Cards do not know,
But your blackened Pages,
Do love it so,

Tell Me Why...
Tell Me Why...
Why did you, take my heart,
Did I love you from the Start?

I see it now.
We're off to war.
Hold me close,
For ever More.

Will this be,
Our last time together?
Hold me Close-
Romeo,
Stay like this forever.

Don't roll those dice in my direction.
Why is it war that leads to "Correction"?
I can see your troubled face in the-
Front Line.
You're still mine.
Until-
the end of time..

Run, My Romeo,
I am after you.
But with deadlier intentions,
And I'm afraid it's true.

The Diamonds spear the Clubs,
And the Clubs they kill the Diamonds,
We share a bond that even,
Time.
Cannot Erase...

My Romeo-
I see your face,
My Romeo-
Drift into Space,

Don't close your eyes!
Please stay alive,
For Me,
My Romeo.

The battle is almost over,
And I think we have won,
The Battle is now over,
Foretold by the Sun.

I take the flask of poision,
Hidden in my sleeve,
I down it all,
And I'm left to grieve,

Wait For me, won't you romeo?
I know a place that only Heaven knows
Where is it that torn lovers go?
I'm still yours, my beloved Romeo...
©2008-2009 ~Help-Me-Fall
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Author's Comments

Wow I spent a lot of time and emotion on this one

The information at the beginning was thanks to my dear friend Elfride(UH) and I owe her one :D

Imagine The Q.O.H as Juliette and The K.O.S as Romeo

Diamonds and Hearts are together since they're red
and Spades and Clubs are together since they're black.

Basically- it's come to war, and the knave of spades have attacked the queens castle before, but it was love at first sight and she couldnt let him go.

The other reds find out about the Knave and hunt him down through the forest and beside the river. The Queen goes down to meet him for the last night before battle.

Then on the battlefield, the queen has to kill as a soldier, and put her aristocracy behind her. The Reds have almost won, when she sees her beloved Knave killed, by one of her own. As the sun rises and the reds turn back to leave for their kingdom, the Queen takes out a flask of poision, and ends her life to be with her beloved Knave

I hope you enjoy!!!

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wow, your poems really are depressing. but nevertheless, i LIKe them depressing. Sarah, you rock. Hard-core. :headbang:
And i love the story of Romeo and Juliet - 'tis my fav shakespeare play :)

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YAY THANKS NAYA CHAN

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Amazing! The imagery works really well, and I can tell you put a lot into this one. It came out quite beautifully!

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Where does that highway go to?

...godisnowhere...
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Thank you xD

Yeah I did put a lot into it, the rhyming at the beginning is ever so SLIGHTLY strange, but i think it flows well as it goes on.

Thanks :D

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Nah, I think the rhyming's just fine. :) Excellent work!

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Where does that highway go to?

...godisnowhere...
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Wow! Wonderful!! I love the comparasion with the cards, hmmm..interesting.

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Someone else's missfortune. Tastes like honey that drips cruely...

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Just add me X3 : black_fly03@hotmail.com
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Wow thanks very much for the fave and the comment, I'm glad you liked the poem and the theme xD

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